coexist_love ([info]coexist_love) wrote,
@ 2006-11-12 22:02:00
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Entry tags:adama/roslin, battlestar galactica, deliverance, fanfic

Deliverance (1/?)
After debating with myself and a few of the people at [info]roslin_adama I decided I would post the first few chapters of Deliverance and see how it goes since I can't guarantee that I will finish this fic before things get too hectic in life.

Title: Deliverance
Author: [info]coexist_love
Rating: MA
Fandom: Battlestar Galactica 2003
Character: General with Roslin/Adama emphasis
Summary: A normal day on among the fleet is disturbed when an unidentified assailant attempts to assassinate President Roslin.
Disclaimer: Not written for money and if I owned Galactica this would have already happened.
Spoilers: Flight of the Pheonix through Epiphanies
Author’s Note: I thought about this while watching Colonial Day and though my setting is very different to begin with it was given further substance by [info]whyoffry and [info]major_zoidberg at LiveJournal and a special thanks to my lovely betas (I had so many ) but in particular [info]whyoffry [info]campmotha and [info]tina_cat

Prologue

Laura yearned to go back to the beach. Funny thing was that she had never really appreciated beaches until she was stuck on a ship all day breathing recycled air and looking out at continually dark spaces all day. It felt almost life affirming when she took off her shoes and the grains of sand ran between her toes. She was at peace.

For a moment she wondered if the cancer had spread to her brain as Dr. Cottle had predicted it would. She wondered if she was even here at all or if it was just some elaborate fantasy world that her mind had created as a result of the cancerous cells invading her precious brain.

But she assured herself that the cancer wouldn’t spread that far in just one morning. She remembered the prognosis that he had given her right before they found Kobol, about how aggressively the cancer had moved into her lymphatic system, but even with the cancer at such an advanced stage the invasion to other systems had taken weeks and Laura was sure that she would be able to dodge the bullet of a brain tumor for a little while longer.

Laura watched the sunset as the water splash against her feet. It felt good, refreshing. For a moment Laura wondered when she last dipped her feet in a tub of water. Her mind drifted to the time she spent at the Riverwalk Section of Caprica City where she sat with her foot dangling in the pool of water created by the fountain. She remembered how good it had felt after being given the news that she had terminal breast cancer. It was almost like bathing her feet would wash away the diagnosis, make the illness go away. But it didn’t go away. It continued to progress to the point where there was nothing she could do.

Dilloxin had never been an option for her. She hated watching the side effects it had on her mother as she faded away over the course of two years. Now she faced a similar demise but turned to the Chamalla. In the beginning it had appeared to be having some effect but over the course of time the benefits seemed to dwindle. Billy had tried to convince her that Diloxin was a good option for her. That she should take it and attempt to live a week or month longer. But Laura wouldn’t hear of it.

As the sky changed to brilliant shades of yellow and orange, Laura began to wonder if this was what heaven was like. An eternity of beautiful sunsets on the beach. Such an idea would make her the happiest person in the world. She could sit back, read a book, and just watch the sunset day in and day out. A small smile graced Laura’s lips at the thought. It was perfect. Absolutely perfect.

Suddenly a violent wave splashed against Laura’s leg and she stepped backward to see a mound of seaweed that had gathered in the current. Laura watched as the wave drew it back out and then back in. Carefully reordering the pieces of kelp so that it formed a distinct shape. When the waves appeared to stop Laura moved closer and looked at the formation with a gasp.

Written on the wet sand was her name in an almost infallible script, Laura.

TBC


Comments and feedback greatly appreciated.




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[info]stormypup
2006-11-13 05:15 am UTC (link)
Wow, the imagery in this was just lovely. I could see the sunset and hear the waves. I'm really looking forward to seeing where this goes! Very well done!

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 05:18 am UTC (link)
Thank you! I am glad you like it! :)

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Wow...
[info]rangergaray
2006-11-13 05:23 am UTC (link)
Beautiful. Your writing flows so well. Loving this so far.

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 05:27 am UTC (link)
Thank you! That's a huge compliment to me. :)

With any luck! Maybe Part I tommorrow.

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[info]vickysg1
2006-11-13 08:09 am UTC (link)
Really nice beginning, hon!
And your description of the scenery is so perfect!

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 07:46 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!! :)

I am glad you liked it!

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[info]maudvandutch
2006-11-13 08:11 am UTC (link)
Very well written, I'm curious to find out where this goes !!!

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 07:35 pm UTC (link)
Thank you for your feedback.

There is definately more to come so it won't be long wait until you have an idea of the plot.

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[info]csiangel
2006-11-13 05:32 pm UTC (link)
Beautiful imagery, so very calming and soothing - I feel so relaxed now. LOL!

Intriguing conclusion there, I look forward to reading this fic. I like the sound of the premise as you explained it :-)

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 07:43 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! The setting is kind of relaxing isn't it? :)

Thanks! It's good to know that someone will be reading the fic. :)

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[info]whyoffry
2006-11-13 07:38 pm UTC (link)
*claps with glee*

Love it.

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 07:46 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

And thank you my wonderful muse! :)

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[info]whyoffry
2006-11-13 07:51 pm UTC (link)
*smooch* Any time.

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 07:53 pm UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]sweetveritas
2006-11-13 07:40 pm UTC (link)
bweautiful hun! When I was reading it, I was swept away lol :D and towards the end I thought it was ambiguous, either that or I'm stupid but the story is beginning sooo well and am looking forward to more :)

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 07:45 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for your comment.

The end does have a meaning but I am going to leave you to toy with that yourself as I post the next few chapters.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 09:16 pm UTC (link)
wait a second. that title seems familiar ;)

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 09:23 pm UTC (link)
hehe! It sure does and I am making some real progress too.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 09:26 pm UTC (link)
^-^ that's good to hear. I don't know the ending, yet ;)

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 09:29 pm UTC (link)
hehe! I know where its going [info]pekeana has helped me flesh some stuff out.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 09:31 pm UTC (link)
lol--when she helped you it's going to be...frakked up. in the best sense of the word XD

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 09:33 pm UTC (link)
oh you won't believe how frakked up it is, but only one part of it, hehe...a part that involves Cain.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 09:37 pm UTC (link)
hehe, I'm going to let me suprise me by you...does this sentence make sense? lol

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 09:40 pm UTC (link)
I think the jist was that you don't want me to spoil you!

But I am about to bring Cain into the story.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 09:42 pm UTC (link)
yeah, I don't want to be spoiled.

Cain, the kitten-killer admiral. lol

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 09:52 pm UTC (link)
Okay I won't spoil you!

Oh yes! The kitten-frakker! I have to write her very very evil. Espeically with the role I want her to play.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 09:55 pm UTC (link)
eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeviiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiil!!!!

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 09:59 pm UTC (link)
Yes must be written as the carnation of evil given her role with the President.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 10:01 pm UTC (link)
Didn't you say you didn't want to spoil me?!? :P

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 10:07 pm UTC (link)
hey all I said was that the President and Cain are involved in some way. Didn't say how.

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[info]billy_red_ocean
2006-11-13 10:15 pm UTC (link)
you have a point there...and we already talked about that ;)

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-13 10:44 pm UTC (link)
Yeah we did talk about Cain, but one aspect we did not.

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[info]wannatee_1984
2006-11-14 08:30 am UTC (link)
oh!!! ficcy!!! i'll read it while I wait for you to talk to me!!! :P

oh how I missed you so!!! XD!!!

*huggles, then wonders where you are* :P

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-14 11:17 am UTC (link)
Yep ficcy!!

I missed you too!

I was in bed! Sleeping in preparation for another day and a driving lesson from hell that I have today. *does not want to leave the house*

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[info]wannatee_1984
2006-11-14 11:20 am UTC (link)
yay for fics!!! XD!!!

yay i was missed! i'll totally missed you more! :P

oh! the dreaded driving lessons eh? good luck with that! :D

ps: have you seen my new wall over at LJ? it's very pretty! and I've got more coming! :D

*huggles and loves ya tight* XD!!!

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-14 11:26 am UTC (link)
Yep you were missed *hugs*

I don't want to go! I told you I was in a car accident! I just don't want to learn how to drive.

No I haven't! I'll have to look tonight! I'm sorry.

*huggles and loves*

Now I have to run!

sorry!

*cries*

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[info]wannatee_1984
2006-11-14 09:02 am UTC (link)
OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHh! fic is GOOD!!!

*off to read next chap* :P

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-14 11:18 am UTC (link)
Thanks! *hugs*

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[info]major_zoidberg
2006-11-20 02:18 am UTC (link)
DUDETTE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am going to be reading your fic tonight! :D Will let you know what i think in the morning! ;D

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[info]coexist_love
2006-11-20 02:33 am UTC (link)
okay...no problem!!! :)

I know its alot at this point

It's 22 pages worth in Microsoft Word.

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